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考场Essay也是不少人的噩梦

看看这两篇像不像你的考场论文?

不同于平时的Assignment

可以有充足的时间进行修改润色

看看这两篇像不像你的考场论文?

在考场上

缺乏参考文献和字典的情况下

在有限的时间内组织出一篇精彩的论文

对于很多人来说还是很困难

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尤其是

很多同学的问题

并不是在于知识不全

只是在表达逻辑上有所欠缺

造成了论文表述不清从而低分

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这次小E就要带大家

进行一场Essay考试

帮助大家好好分析下问题在哪里?

来来来,假设你现在就要考试,论文题目如下:

01

论文题目

首先是阅读资料:

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Intelligent Machines

智能机器

Many of the goods and services we depend on daily are now supplied by intelligent, automatedmachines rather than human beings.

我们每天所依赖的许多商品和服务现在是由智能自动化的机器而不是人类提供的。

Robots build cars and other goods on assembly lines, where oncethere were human workers. Many of our phone conversations are now conducted not with people butwith sophisticated technologies.

在流水线上机器取代了人工来建造汽车和其他物品。包括现在我们的许多电话交谈不是与人进行的,而是与先进技术进行的。

We can now buy goods at a variety of stores without the help of ahuman cashier. Automation is generally seen as a sign of progress, but what is lost when we replacehumans with machines?

我们无需人工收银即可在各种商店购买商品。自动化通常被视为进步的标志,但是当我们用机器代替人时会失去什么呢?

Given the accelerating variety and prevalence of intelligent machines, it isworth examining the implications and meaning of their presence in our lives.

鉴于人工智能的种类繁多和普及,值得研究它们在我们生活中的影响和意义。

Read and carefully consider these perspectives. Each suggests a particular way of thinking about theincreasing presence of intelligent machines.

阅读并仔细考虑这些观点。每一个都是思考智能机器日益增多的一种角度。

观点1:

What we lose with the replacement of people by machines is some part of our own humanity. Even our mundane daily encounters no longer require from us basic courtesy, respect, and tolerance for other people.

机器代替人工会让我们失去人类的一部分。甚至会让我们在日常中遇到他人也不在需要保持基本礼貌与尊重宽容。

观点2:

Machines are good at low-skill, repetitive jobs, and at high-speed, extremely precise jobs. In both cases they work better than humans. This efficiency leads to a more prosperous and progressive world for everyone.

机器擅长于低技能,重复性工作,以及高速,极其精确的工作。在这两种情况下,它们都比人类更好地工作。这种效率为每个人带来了一个更加繁荣和进步的世界。

观点3:

Intelligent machines challenge our long-standing ideas about what humans are or can be. This is good because it pushes both humans and machines toward new, unimagined possibilities.

智能机器挑战了我们关于人类是或“什么可以成为人类”的过往观念。这很好,因为它将人类和机器推向了新的,无法想象的可能未来。

写作要求:

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论文要求:

Write a unified, coherent essay about the increasing presence of intelligentmachines. In your essay, be sure to:

关于日益增长的人工智能。写一篇表达流畅的文章。在你的文章中,一定要:

•clearly state your own perspective on the issue and analyze the relationshipbetween your perspective and at least one other perspective

清楚地陈述你自己对这个问题的看法,并分析你的观点与至少一个其他观点之间的关系

•develop and support your ideas with reasoning and examples

用论证和论据来发展和支持你的观点

•organize your ideas clearly and logically

清晰合理地组织你的观点

•communicate your ideas effectively in standard written English

用标准的书面英语有效地传达您的观点

Your perspective may be in full agreement with any of those given, in partialagreement, or completely different.

你的观点可以与任何一个给出的观点完全一致,部分一致,或者完全不同。

当然,也少不了一点补充说明:

补充说明

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写作安排

Use the space below and on the back cover to generate ideas and plan your essay.

在这些草稿纸上的草稿不会计入分数。

You may wish toconsider the following as you think critically about the task:

利用封底和封底的空白页来打草稿和进行规划,在对任务进行批判性思考时,请考虑以下几点:

Strengths and weaknesses of different perspectives on the issue

在这个问题上不同观点的优缺点

• What insights do they offer, and what do they fail to consider?

他们提供了什么见解,他们没有考虑到什么?

• Why might they be persuasive to others, or why might they fail to persuade?Your own knowledge, experience, and values

为什么他们可能对他人有说服力,或者为什么他们没有说服力?你自己的知识、经验和价值观

• What is your perspective on this issue, and what are its strengths and weaknesses?

你对这个问题的看法是什么,它的优点和缺点是什么?

• How will you support your perspective in your essay?

你将如何在论文中支持你的观点?

很好我们的论文题目已经结束

这个题目内容比较简单,根据问题以及提供了三种观点,写篇简单的essay。

那么,如果是你,你会怎么写?

现在不妨做个初步的草稿大纲,因为后面我们就要放作业以及解析!你完成篇初稿可以自己对照打分哦~

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02

案例解析

那,假设大家都已经完成了写作,或者已经有了底稿,我们现在就拿两篇作业作为示例。

请注意,这两篇Essay并不是“标准答案”,而是“失败案例”,请大家先自行对比分析两篇Essay的不足之处,并进行打分。在下一步,我们会进一步分析。

案例1

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案例1:

Well Machines are good but they take people jobs like if they don’t know how to use it they get fired and they’ll find someone else and it’s more easyer with machines but sometimes they don’t need people because of this machines do there own job and there be many people that lack on there job but the intelligent machines sometimes may not work or they’ll brake easy and it’s waste of money on this machines and there really expensive to buy but they help alot at the same time it help alot but at the same time this intelligent machines work and some don’t work but many store buy them and end up broken or not working but many stores gets them and end up wasting money on this intelligent machines’ but how does it help us and the comunity because some people get fired because they do not need him because of this machines many people are losing job’s because of this machines.(不用数了,原文就一个句号)

机器是好的,但它们能让人们做一些工作,比如如果他们不知道如何使用它,他们就会被解雇,他们会找到其他人,使用机器更容易一些的人,但是有时候因为这台机器的存在他们不需要人,机器可以自己工作,有很多人缺少工作,但是智能机器有时可能无法工作,或者很容易损坏,在这样的机器上是浪费钱的,而且购买起来确实很昂贵,但他们同时提供了很多帮助很多,但与此同时,这种智能机器可以工作,有些不能工作,但是许多商店购买了它们,最终坏了或无法工作,但很多商店买了,最后却浪费了钱智能机器’但它如何帮助我们和社区,因为有些人被解雇,因为他们不需要他,因为这台机器许多人失去工作,因为这台机器。